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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 2
  Development - 3
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 1
  
  Grade: 80
  Fantastic use of illustrations!
  There are some problems with run on or fragment sentences on pages 1,3, and 4. ALso, I can't tell if the bunny really woke up on page 6 or is still dreaming. That makes the plot confusing. Finally, the ending doesn't clearly answer the question, "Is it better not to know?" Can you fix these things?

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  jmikulski says:
  You fixed page 1, but 3 and 4 are still incorrect. Page 6 looks good. The ending is a bit more clear, but still could use some work.
  
  New Grade: 88

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  Seemed like the picture were made just for your story. Nice job.

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)

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