A Tale To Chant...
A mistake can be solved, but the one the young girl makes, has a question but no answer.
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Published: March 17, 2010
Updated: March 24, 2010
Total Pages: 15
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To any who is wanting to comment, I've made a few misktakes and some pages don't have writing on it. Vislulise
This is a much more complex story, Gen. Remember to proofread very carefully before you publish. Keep up the great work!!
Mrs E
Thanks Mrs E! I will proofread the next a publish a storybird! Thank You!
Anyone else who reads it please comment! I really want some feedback! Thanks!
I didn't get quite understand the story,even though the description of the scenes is quite vivid.Probably the complete story would make for a more enjoyable read.The plot however does look complex yet not hopelessly tangled up. Keep it going gen!!
Hi Gen, great job! I was quite intrigued with your storyline. I really like the way you use questioning as a technique and your vocab is very mature. Just a hint: it seems that you leave out words here and there so perhaps this could be something to focus on when you are editing your work. Keep the stories coming!
Mrs K :)
(from Year 4)
Thanks Mrs K! I know how to edit my story so I will! BY the way some of the slides didn't have script! I did that on purpose!
Thanks Vijay mama! Thanks for the feedback! I will keep writing when I a new idea pops out! Cool you joined! Please send me the stories you publish!
'I'm mean pops up'!
Glad to hear that you will keep writing and keep editing, Geneviev. Btw, when I gave you that hint, I wasn't referring to the pages without text. I knew that you were creating effect and I liked the way you did that.
Sorry not Vijay Mama! Thanks Kabir!