Lies
Evil misleads a young girl, wanting to deceive her. Will she see through his lies?
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Published: Aug. 4, 2010
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Beautifully written with an essential message, love it. :)
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loved it
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That was SUCH a good poem with a great message. Well Done! :)
particleman hearted this
Lovely--and true, to boot!
Probably the best storybird I've read so far. Bravo!
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Wow. I congratulate you for being so talented.
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I loved it. That person really stood up for him/herself.
amm10 hearted this
fantastic! i like it!
Great story-
From Reuben
novelman hearted this
very good I loved it!
That is absolutely AMAZING! Well Done;D
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love the story check out my story peter the brave
babird hearted this
love the story chek my story sweet little bumblbee.
Excellent. Added to my reading list. Great positive message for all the ages.
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LOVE IT !!!!!!!!
Marree hearted this
this is done very well.
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love it
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Noen hearted this
Your story is good but what is there names.do they even have names
The message is what I want to send to everyone in the world.
P.S You beat me in ryhming...WOW!
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That was a great and heart moving storybird. Your creativity is used well. Keep writing! My review.. raves as five stars!! *****
hey good story make anotor one.
ajohnson1- I didn't see a story called "Peter the Brave." The only one that I could see was a story called "The First Rabbit on the Moon." Is that the one you wanted me to look at?
babird- I read and commented on your "Sweet Little Bumblebee" story.
SDHAK- Currently FogCat and I are working on a story. I'm not sure when it will be finished, but look for it in the future!
To everyone- thank you for all of your lovely comments. I am very flattered and humbled by them. I hope that you all will keep writing your own stories, because that's what makes storybird great!
I think it was very good but i am not a poem person but i think i am now bravo!!!!.
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I love this poem! It shows how good can conquer evil, and gives for good reading too!
Cute book I like. I hope I can read some other new books of yours soon
You have a ton of stories. This one is the first one I've read, and it is FANTASTIC! I will read more
Stormy- The protagonist does not have a name. I didn't name the protagonist because ANYONE can fight against evil- it does not matter WHO they are. The antagonist is only referred to as "Evil" and "The Great Deceiver."
amm10- The protagonist could be either a boy or a girl. In the description I said that the protagonist was a girl, but it could be a boy just as easily. I tend to write mostly-female characters, but I would like readers to be able to put themselves in the place of the protagonist.
wow nise job!!!
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A must read!
SpaerklyRaine hearted this
oh my gosh i cant believe i read that my friend she always tells lies which is annoying
Looks like a real book but cool to!
that was cool! how did you think of so many rhymes? your story was also true!
thats really good your a great story writer
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HOWZAT
GREAT STORY!love it!
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:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):) loved it!
Amazing Rhymes1 I love it!
icbico hearted this
a-maz-ing!!! its my fave so far!!!!!!!!!! :) write another please????????? :)
kadomada hearted this
Wow! This is a wonderful storybird!!
And it rhymes, too!
Nice work;)
NICE BOOK
This is the seventeenth time I have read this and i still love it!!! :)
have you wrote another????
jcarroll- I have not yet written another story. I'm not a very disciplined writer, which means that I write only when inspiration strikes, and not when I don't feel like writing.
Until I write a new story, check out my most recent story, "A Story in Six Words," and see if you can write your own six word story.
thanks, Atleast i have something to look forward to! :)
harder than it looks,must say :)
wow
love this the best!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THIS IS THE BEST BOOK I HAVE EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOVE THIS THE BEST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Cool.
billiatm hearted this
That was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Can read it again can i read it again please!!!!!!!!!!!!!
kaye hearted this
i posted it on facebook for my friends to see i hope it becomes more popular! :)
studentg hearted this
that was rearly intersting and you are right anyone can defet evil and you have enspired me
catwomen222 hearted this
beautiful story bravo
This is a very heart felt story and i loved it :)
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i liked the rymes GO EMINEM!!!!!
Hi
i havent read this story for a while now and i just read it again still amazing i even showed my family amazing!!!!!!!!! :)
wow nice a story in six words you really are an inspiring reader!
Zibbycomix you should check out my book called bully I put alot of effort into it and it might be one of my best oh and a few people like my book called 'my perfect valentines' thanks! :)
jcarroll- I read and commented on "Bully". I think that you have talent and I hope that you keep writing!
thank you. I am trying to think about a good story if your going to make a story it may as well be as good as possible!
zibbycomix I have one more book dedicated to you all about inspiration! it is called 'When Inspiration Strikes' thank you
jcarroll, I was blown away that you dedicated a story to me. Thank you so much.
Also, I agree with you- when you are writing something, it is important to spend time and effort on it so that it will touch not only you, but also others. You caring about your stories makes others care about them too. You are wise to make your stories as good as possible. Keep on doing great work! I know that you can, and I know that you will.
jcarroll wanted me to read your book and it was worth it.
ziibbycomix it is me jcarroll i forgot my password so i now have a new account. i have a new poem in my account i hope you read and enjoy thank you for inspiration!
you have unhuman like awsome writing skills
lushlover- It says that you do not have any storybirds to share publicly. Maybe your story hasn't been approved yet? Or maybe you set your story to "private" instead of "public"?
It means a lot to me that I've inspired you. Remember that you can inspire people too- I hope that you continue to write many more stories.
I love your storybird!!!!
Ah, lies. The horrible rotton things that people use to make themselves seem important. Nice job on the story! I loved it!
beautiful
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love it