Lost Fish

Author:

ajdkkh

Illustrator:

Aaron Blecha

Age Group:

1-3 years

jmikulski says:
Meaning - 2
Development - 4
Illustrations - 4
Mechanics - 3

Grade: 93
Great story, but there's a few little things to fix. First, there's a wording issue on page 6. See if you can fix that. Also, in order for the question "Is it better not to know" to be clear, you need to make it more understood on the last page. See if you can add something there.

Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
mikefisher821 says:
You could write a great companion story called "Lost Boy" and tell the story from James' perspective and how he really liked to eat kids all along, he was just too small before. Excellent job! -Mike Fisher
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
kaye says:
How sad, it definitely would be "better not to know" about his fish.
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
rlobaugh says:
Boy, I bet Joe was sorry he went looking for his fish! I sure hope his Dad never takes the family dog swimming at the seaside!!! (Now THERE'S another idea...)
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
monk51295 says:
I love the suit Joe went swimming in.
Hey - save this story, when you learn about calculating radioactive decay in math, you can figure out how long till that swim spot could be safe again. :)
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)