Comments (4)

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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 2
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 2
  
  Grade: 87
  I really like that you used dialogue to tell your story. There's a few grammar problems with it though, that can be easily fixed. Also, the question "Is it better not to know" isn't as clear as I'd like it to be. Can you reword the last page or so to make it more apparent?

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  A few fixes need in the use of dialogue...try to clarify who is speaking with use of commas in the right places and dialogue tags. Interesting use of the images...Goggles is a cutie, but I like his mom the best. I'm looking forward to seeing the final draft!

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  Well, the dog is darn cute, too...

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  Nice job twisting around that conversation. That had to be tough. I'm glad there was no monster.

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)

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