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  ihancock says:
  Great idea, Ferinhator. I like the recurring phrase at the beginning of each page highlighting a different thing you like about your brother.It really helps to tie the story together. I also like your sense of rhyming words to create a flow to your writing though sometimes it can be a little excessive. Maybe also check some of your spelling (i.e. try/tries). Overall a great concept and well written! I enjoyed it. It made me think of my sister!
  
  Ian

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  yoshiminstu says:
  this so touching!!!

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  emoster says:
  i like this excelent touching too

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  poo1234poo1 says:
  the story was cool

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  michaelw says:
  FANTASTIC YOU ARE A GREAT WRITER

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  ayeaye says:
  Awesome. Nayland is one lucky brother. :)

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  1566 says:
  Cute story! ur brother sounds Awesome!

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  snowy26526 says:
  its a nice sorty

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  stricker says:
  Nise riming
  

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  overlord says:
  nice

  Posted 22 months ago (Permalink)
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  henryetta says:
  Your brother sounds alot like mire exept I am the one who's the slow eater.

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  kgrlove says:
  its nice!!

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