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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 4
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 4
  
  Grade - 99
  There is one small word problem on the 1st page. Fix that, and you get a 100!

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  mikefisher821 says:
  This would be great as a rhymed poem. I thought the story had a lyrical quality to it. Also, I like that your teacher lets you fix stuff for a better grade. That's awesome. -Mike Fisher

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  kaye says:
  Nice work pinkpanther!

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  Very effective use of illustrations to tell the story. I also thought your word choice evidenced an 8th grade vocabulary, such as use of the word "route" instead of path. Page 5 came alive for me...I could imagine the people gathering in disbelief and the murmur among the crowd as the mermaid never showed up. (One small typo on page 10.)

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  jmikulski says:
  Thanks for fixing the typos!
  
  Grade: 100

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  Awww. How sad. I've been told that's a sign of a good writer - that they don't always add a happy ending.

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)

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