The Disappearance

Author:

pinkpanther

Illustrator:

Victoria Usova

Age Group:

1-3 years

jmikulski says:
Meaning - 4
Development - 4
Illustrations - 4
Mechanics - 4

Grade - 99
There is one small word problem on the 1st page. Fix that, and you get a 100!
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
mikefisher821 says:
This would be great as a rhymed poem. I thought the story had a lyrical quality to it. Also, I like that your teacher lets you fix stuff for a better grade. That's awesome. -Mike Fisher
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
kaye says:
Nice work pinkpanther!
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
rlobaugh says:
Very effective use of illustrations to tell the story. I also thought your word choice evidenced an 8th grade vocabulary, such as use of the word "route" instead of path. Page 5 came alive for me...I could imagine the people gathering in disbelief and the murmur among the crowd as the mermaid never showed up. (One small typo on page 10.)
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
jmikulski says:
Thanks for fixing the typos!

Grade: 100
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)
monk51295 says:
Awww. How sad. I've been told that's a sign of a good writer - that they don't always add a happy ending.
Posted 8 months ago (Permalink)