Comments (5)

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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 1
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 4
  
  Grade: 88
  I think I like your pictures best so far! They seem a natural fit for the story you wish to tell. The problem, however, is that I don't see how your story fits the question "Is it better not to know." You can probably rework the end pages to make that the clear message. Also, one minor typo on page 8. See if you can find it!
  

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  Your story fits typical plot development so well! I got to know who Destinino was and what he was like, and I sensed the climax coming as Destinino relaxed into his bad habits. However, it still isn't clear to the reader what the overall message of the story is...I agree with Mr. Mikulski...a few tweeks to the last few pages can fix that gliche.

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  AAB says:
  Awesome story!

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  Cool pictures. Nice job matching your story to them. :)

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  pamthompson says:
  I agree - your pictures are a great match to your story.

  Posted 19 months ago (Permalink)

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