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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 3
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 3
  Mechanics - 3
  
  Grade:90
  Good concept for a story! Just a few things to fix:
  There's a jump in the story between the girl's dream and the party. It was kind of difficult to follow.Also, the last page seems to force the question "Is it better not to know" into the story. I think it could be written in a different way to make it fit better.

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  choco123 says:
  good story

  Posted 30 months ago (Permalink)
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  hearted 30 months ago

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