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  greenhorn says:
  Hi kids, I have read your story and it appears that you have included all of the essential elements of a good story. The only thing that I can suggest is that you add more describing words to the next story. For instance, describe the carrot in more detail. Tell how he was captured by the mini rabbits. I loved it and I am very proud of you. Love, Grammie

  Posted 27 months ago (Permalink)

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