Comments (6)

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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 4
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 4
  
  Grade - 98
  Just a few minor errors with word choice and fluency. Overall, excellent story!

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  orchfan says:
  This is great! I like that it is so concise. The concept is very good too (the mouse wishing to be an elephant). Very true to the theme your teacher assigned!

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  mikefisher821 says:
  I like that his attitude didn't change when his perspective changed. Very true of real life. Great job! -Mike Fisher

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  kaye says:
  I like the theme as well, but was a bit surprised that what the elephant saw was the same as what the mouse saw!

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  That poor little mouse! After all of that work gathering and stacking, he must have been exhausted! Too bad he found the "new" view disappointing. I enjoyed that you were able to get the message across in an easy-to-follow storyline, but I was also surprised that he didn't see things differently once he climbed on top of the elephant. Interesting and unexpected twist!

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  makes me happy to be me. does it make you happy to be you? you - great writer of stories... :)

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)

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