Comments (3)

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  jmikulski says:
  Meaning - 2
  Development - 4
  Illustrations - 4
  Mechanics - 4
  
  Grade: 94
  Excellent use of images! Your story is very entertaining, however, the question "Is it better not to know" should be more evident in the last page. Can you fix that? Also, I don't know if Oobi's condition being called "fatal" fits the story. Maybe change that word too.

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  rlobaugh says:
  I really enjoyed this story! It makes me wonder what changes Oobi went through when he first acquired the "disease" he passed on to Kellan. I hope he never sneezes in MY lemonade. At least Kellan has an idea of what may have caused all those crazy changes he experienced...it was better to know, in my opinion! Fun reading :)

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)
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  monk51295 says:
  I love twirly straws. Great way to start the story.
  Good use of all those images. Unconnected pictures fit well in your storyline.

  Posted 26 months ago (Permalink)

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